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You recently bought a vouum cleaner and now it is not properly.

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Dear Sir or Madam. I am writing in the hope of that you can help me with a problem regarding vocuum cleaner that I recently bought from your shop. After only two days thing started to go wrong. On the 8th of March I visited one of your local shop in order to buy a vocuum cleaner for my girl friend. Looking around the shop I encountered expected item and I asked a shop assistant about it. After getting all information I decided to purchase it. Three days later, my friend made a call and said about the problems of the items. When she used the machine for the first time it worked probably and clean the carpet the problem of the item. When she used the machine for the first time it worked properly and clean the carpet. However, when she unilized it the second time there seemed to have been a malfunction while it was working. A little dust is not clean when use it. I am looking forward to your reply and the resolution of this matter. I will want two weeks before turning to Customer Service Association responsible for this problem. Please contact me at the above address or call me on my mobile phone at 5555555. Your sincerely. Shoira
Dear Sir or Madam.

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help
me with a
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problem
regarding
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vocuum
cleaner that I recently
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bought
from your
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shop
.
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After
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only
two days thing
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started
to go
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wrong
.

On the 8th of March I visited one of your local
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shop
in order to
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buy
a
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vocuum
cleaner for my girl friend. Looking around the
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shop
I encountered
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expected
item and I asked a
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shop
assistant about it.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
getting all information I decided to
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purchase
it. Three days later, my friend made a call and said about the
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problems
of the items. When she
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used
the machine for the
first
time it worked
probably
and clean the carpet the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
of the item. When she
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
the machine for the
first
time it worked
properly
and clean the carpet.
However
, when she
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unilized
it the second time there seemed to have been a malfunction while it was working. A
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
dust is not clean when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it. I am looking forward to your reply and the resolution of this matter. I will want two weeks
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before
turning to Customer Service Association responsible for this
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problem
.
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Please
contact me at the above address or call me on my mobile phone at 5555555.

Your
sincerely
.

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Shoira
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IELTS letter You recently bought a vouum cleaner and now it is not properly.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
213 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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