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you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. you phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. in your letter, 1. describe the problem with equipment, 2. explain what happened when you phoned the shop, 3. say what you would like the manager to do.

you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. you phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. in your letter, 1. describe the problem with equipment, 2. explain what happened when you phoned the shop, 3. say what you would like the manager to do. 8bWP
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter with reference to my last visit to your shop on last weekend. I have purchased samsung microwave oven and while buying it, we have tested all the way and it was working very comfortably with all types of food. Nevertheless, when we reached to the home and we have tried to warm some dry food as per the given the procedure in the catalog and what we have seen? that instrument is not taking power through the switch board, even we tried with different room's power board but it won't starting. Hence, I have called immediately to your store and we have complained about it and from your end you have promised to replace it. Besides, the complain, no one visited to our house till now. So, our request to the manager that, kindly visit our house with new piece of oven with same model number and replace it as earliest since it's just purchased and as per your policy you have to change it. I really appreciate your positive response on the same, you can reach me on mobile number 709805 57984, before coming to my house. Your faithfully, John.
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter with reference to my last visit to your shop on last weekend. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
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samsung
microwave oven and while buying it, we have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tested
all the way and it was working
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very
comfortably
with all types of food.

Nevertheless
, when we reached to the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
home and
we have tried to warm
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
dry food as per the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the procedure in the catalog and what we have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
?
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
that
instrument is not taking power through the switch board, even we tried with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
room's power board
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but
it won't
The verb 'won't' requires base form of this verb: "start"
starting
.
Hence
, I have called immediately to your
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store and
we have complained about it and from your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
you have promised to replace it.
Besides
, the
The word 'complain' is a verb. Did you mean the noun "complaint"?
complain
, no one visited to our
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house
till
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, our request to the manager that, kindly visit our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
with new piece of oven with same model number and replace it as earliest since it's
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
and as per your policy you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
it.

I
really
appreciate your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response on the same, you can reach me on mobile number 709805 57984,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
coming to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
, John.

IELTS letter you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. you phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. in your letter, 1. describe the problem with equipment, 2. explain what happened when you phoned the shop, 3. say what you would like the manager to do.

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198 words
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