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You re going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who live there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give details of your study plans, explain why you want to get part time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

Dear Ethel, I’m writing to ask you a favor I will go to abroad same as where you are right now. I will study and I’d like to ask you to look for a part -time job for me. I’m going to study, Business Management for 2 year- at Toronto University. This week coming is my flight because after a week my classes will start. I was enrolled last week and I have my schedule. Saturday and Sunday, I don't have a classes and it’s good to have a job. I hope you will find a part time job for me, I badly needed an extra income to pay the rent of the house and for my groceries every week. I had work experience to a restaurant as a Crew for 1 year and 6months as a call center to the mall. I had a certificate that i worked before. I will be great full for your help. Thank you and God bless. Your friend, Judith
Dear Ethel,

I’m writing to ask you a favor I will
There isn’t usually a preposition before “abroad”. Did you mean “go abroad”?
go to abroad
same as where you are right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
. I will
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
study and
I’d like to ask you to look for a part -time job for me.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
’m going to study, Business Management for 2 year- at Toronto University. This week coming is my flight
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
after a week my classes will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
. I
was enrolled
last week and I have my schedule. Saturday and Sunday, I don't have a
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
classes and
it’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to have a job. I hope you will find a
This word is normally spelled with a hyphen.
part time
job for me, I
badly
needed an extra income to pay the rent of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and for my groceries every week.

I had work experience to a restaurant as a Crew for 1 year and 6months as a call center to the mall.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
had a certificate that
Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.
i
worked
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will be great full for your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

Thank you and God bless.

Your friend,

Judith
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IELTS letter You re going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who live there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give details of your study plans, explain why you want to get part time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
165 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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