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You re going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who live there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give details of your study plans, explain why you want to get part time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

Dear Ethel, I’m writing to ask you a favor I will go to abroad same as where you are right now. I will study and I’d like to ask you to look for a part -time job for me. I’m going to study, Business Management for 2 year- at Toronto University. This week coming is my flight because after a week my classes will start. I was enrolled last week and I have my schedule. Saturday and Sunday, I don't have a classes and it’s good to have a job. I hope you will find a part time job for me, I badly needed an extra income to pay the rent of the house and for my groceries every week. I had work experience to a restaurant as a Crew for 1 year and 6months as a call center to the mall. I had a certificate that i worked before. I will be great full for your help. Thank you and God bless. Your friend, Judith

Dear Ethel,

I’m writing to ask you a favor I will There isn’t usually a preposition before “abroad”. Did you mean “go abroad”?go abroad
go to abroad
 same as where you are right This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
. I will Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).study, and
study and
 I’d like to ask you to look for a part -time job for me.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.Furthermore, ILikewise, INot only that, but I
I
’m going to study, Business Management for 2 year- at Toronto University. This week coming is my flight This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 after a week my classes will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
. I was enrolled
 last week and I have my schedule. Saturday and Sunday, I don't have a Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).classes, and
classes and
 it’s This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 to have a job. I hope you will find a This word is normally spelled with a hyphen.part-time
part time
 job for me, I badly
 needed an extra income to pay the rent of the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 and for my groceries every week.

I had work experience to a restaurant as a Crew for 1 year and 6months as a call center to the mall. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.Furthermore, ILikewise, INot only that, but I
I
 had a certificate that Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 worked This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.Furthermore, ILikewise, INot only that, but I
I
 will be great full for your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
.

Thank you and God bless.

Your friend,

Judith