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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

Dear Mr Smith, I am a student of Business English and currently, I am in my last year of this course. Recently, the student counsellor informed me that the summer work placement programme is no longer being offered by the school. I have a few concerns regarding this sudden change for which I am writing you this letter. This programme is considered to be extremely useful for students as it enables us to gain practical knowledge and prepares us for the future. The reason I got enrolled in this course was because of this placement programme since no other course is currently offering such opportunities. Having said that, I had been working on the placement applications for quite some time solely for the purpose of getting to work with well-known organizations. Therefore, I would request you to kindly reconsider your decision and make this programme available especially for those students who are in their last year as it would help us to secure jobs after graduation. Looking forward to your positive response. Yours sincerely, Ifrah Rao.
Dear Mr Smith,

I am a
student
of Business English and
currently
, I am in my last year of this course. Recently, the
student
counsellor
informed me that the summer work placement
programme
is no longer
being offered
by the school. I have a few concerns regarding this sudden
change
for which I am writing you this letter.

This
programme
is considered
to be
extremely
useful for
students
as it enables us to gain practical knowledge and prepares us for the future. The reason I
got
enrolled in this course was
because of this
placement
programme
since no other course is
currently
offering such opportunities. Having said that, I had been working on the placement applications for quite
some
time
solely
for the purpose of getting to work with well-known organizations.

Therefore
, I would request you to kindly reconsider your decision and
make
this
programme
available
especially
for those
students
who are in their last year as it would
help
us to secure jobs after graduation.

Looking forward to your
positive
response.

Yours
sincerely
,

Ifrah
Rao
.
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IELTS letter You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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