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You normally go shopping in the area where you live . However, the facilities for shoppers can be improved. Write a letter to local newspaper In your letter - Say in general what you like about shopping in your area - Say what is wrong In facilities - Say how it can be improved

You normally go shopping in the area where you live. However, the facilities for shoppers can be improved. Write a letter to local newspaper In your letter - Say in general what you like about shopping in your area - Say what is wrong In facilities - Say how it can be improved ogEb
Dear sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your notice regarding the poor facilities of the Star shopping area. I am a resident of Star Nagar and a frequent visitor to this shopping place. This can be considered as a one-stop place to shop from groceries to clothing. This place is exciting to shop since the prices are economic-friendly. Moreover, the fashion trend gets updated in this market once a week! Unfortunately, this market requires development in facilities. To be precise, this area gets overcrowded during weekends and festivals. Shop owners’ states that no parking facility could be one of the key reasons for crowd. In recent days, several theft cases are reported in this area which is highly disturbing. I would like to suggest that the hordes of people can be controlled if the shops extend their working hours during the peak times. In addition, the government should construct no less than two parking slots in the benefit of customers. To reduce the theft, this market needs to be closely monitored through surveillance cameras and cops. I hope you would consider my suggestions, Yours Sincerely, Nancy
Dear sir or Madam,

I am writing to bring to your notice regarding the poor facilities of the Star shopping area. I am a resident of Star Nagar and a frequent visitor to this shopping place. This can
be considered
as a one-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
place to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
from groceries to clothing. This place is exciting to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
since the prices are economic-friendly.
Moreover
, the fashion trend
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
updated in this market once a week! Unfortunately, this market requires development in facilities.

To be precise, this area
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
overcrowded during weekends and festivals.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Shop
owners’ states that no parking facility could be one of the key reasons for crowd. In recent days, several theft cases
are reported
in this area which is
highly
disturbing.

I would like to suggest that the hordes of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
be controlled
if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
extend their working hours during the peak times.
In addition
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should construct no less than two parking slots in the benefit of customers. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the theft, this market needs to be
closely
monitored through surveillance cameras and cops.

I hope you would consider my suggestions,

Yours
Sincerely
,

Nancy
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IELTS letter You normally go shopping in the area where you live. However, the facilities for shoppers can be improved. Write a letter to local newspaper In your letter - Say in general what you like about shopping in your area - Say what is wrong In facilities - Say how it can be improved

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
188 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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