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Write a letter to friend to inform them of a celebration you are having for a recent job promotion. Include information about The promotion The celebration Their accomodation

Write a letter to friend to inform them of a celebration you are having for a recent job promotion. Include information about The promotion The celebration Their accomodation lKWW
Hello Oleg, This is Victor. I am writing to you to invite you to a party dedicated to celebration my new job position. First of all, do you remember Mr. Smith? He used to be cheff accountant and my boss. Last week he got 80. And he desided to quit the company because of age. The chairman meet me and promote me to Mr's Smith position. So, now I cheef accountant of Minisoft Corparation Canada! And it's meen the increase of my sallary of course. It would be pleasure for me to have you on the party. The celebration will be next weekend. In my new house, I am sure you know the adress. All our friends from our university will be there. The begining at 11 am Sunday. Please dress casual. There will be bear and snacks. Feel fre to stay at my home. I'll give you uncle's Nick room. He is moved to Thailand for vacation. I wish you deffinitely come, as I know, if you had not helped me with my studies at the university, I would not have received this position. Well, let me finish there. Best regards, Victor
Hello Oleg,

This is Victor. I am writing to you to invite you to a party dedicated to celebration my new job position.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, do you remember Mr. Smith? He
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used
to be
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cheff
accountant and my boss. Last week he
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got
80. And he
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desided
to quit the
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company
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because
of age. The chairman
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meet
me and promote me to Mr's Smith position.
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So
,
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now
I
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cheef
accountant of
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Minisoft
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Corparation
Canada! And it's
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meen
the increase of my
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sallary
of course
.

It would be pleasure for me to have you on the party. The celebration will be
next
weekend. In my new
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house
, I am sure you know the
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adress
. All our friends from our university will be there. The
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begining
at 11 am Sunday.
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Please
dress casual. There will be bear and snacks.

Feel
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fre
to stay at my home. I'll give you uncle's Nick room. He is
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moved
to Thailand for vacation.

I wish you
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deffinitely
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come
, as I know
If " if" starts an indirect question, you do not need to put a comma before it.
, if
you had not
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helped
me with my studies at the university, I would not have received this position.

Well,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me finish there.

Best regards,

Victor

IELTS letter Write a letter to friend to inform them of a celebration you are having for a recent job promotion. Include information about The promotion The celebration Their accomodation

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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