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You need to take some time off of work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager. In your letter: Ask for time off and explain why Provide the dates and times for which you will be unavailable to work Describe what you will do to prepare or make up for your absence

I am writing to ask you about some days off from job for my sisters marriage. I will be unavailable to come for a first week next month. If you would say i am willing to do extra shifts. I know it will be hard for you to give me days off in these busy work days but i really need one week off. My sister's marriage has been arranged. The function will go for six days and I want to attend all the ceremonies as this is my only sister's marriage. Therefore, i need off from job for one week. The function will start on 2 april and will last on 7 april. Also the next day is sunday on 8th april so i will get time to have rest from the tiredness of parties. If you would say i will cover up my these off days by working overtime. Also, i can work on sundays for some time and will finish the incompleted work. I am looking forward for your reply. Yours sincerely, Satveer
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in these busy work days
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. My sister's marriage has
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. The function will go for six days and I want to attend all the ceremonies as this is my
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sister's marriage.

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,
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time to have rest from the tiredness of parties.

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you
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would say
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i
will cover up my these
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days by working overtime.
Also
,
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can work on
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sundays
for
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I am looking forward for your reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Satveer
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IELTS letter You need to take some time off of work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager. In your letter: Ask for time off and explain why Provide the dates and times for which you will be unavailable to work Describe what you will do to prepare or make up for your absence

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6.0
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