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You have won a competition and won a prize. Write a letter to invite a friend

Hi Ali I am writing to inform you that I won the drama competition held on 25th February. I am feeling over the moon right now. I wish you would be here for the celebration. Anyhow, I am inviting you to the prize distribution ceremony arranged by intercollegiate competition society on 25th March to acknowledge the winners I supposed to invite you on the festival unfortunately you were busy in your exams. If you are free these days, you are invited to participate. The award celebrations will start at 8: 00 AM in the morning followed by the music concert and magic show to entertain the audience. There are 4 segments to award the drama, music, comedy, stall & model competition. The whole festivity will finish with in 3 hours. I am sure you will enjoy. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Cheers Ahmad Mustafa
Hi Ali

I am writing to inform you that I won the drama competition held on 25th February. I am feeling over the moon right
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now
. I wish you would be here for the celebration. Anyhow, I am inviting you to the prize distribution ceremony arranged by intercollegiate competition society on 25th March to acknowledge the winners

I supposed to invite you on the festival unfortunately you were busy in your exams. If you are free these days, you
are invited
to participate.

The award celebrations will
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start
at 8: 00
This is redundant. Consider using "AM".
AM in the morning
followed by the music concert and magic
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show
to entertain the audience. There are 4 segments to award the drama, music, comedy, stall & model competition. The whole festivity will finish with in 3 hours. I am sure you will enjoy.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Cheers

Ahmad Mustafa
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IELTS letter You have won a competition and won a prize. Write a letter to invite a friend

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
146 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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