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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, VBYWD
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Anirudh Pillala and my enrolment no. is 7534. I currently share room # 24 with Rob Tech in Alpha Resident. I am writing this letter to bring to your notice the problems I am facing and to request a change of room. While Rob is a well-hearted individual, some of his habits and lifestyle have a disturbing impact on me and my work. One of the primary problems is that he doesn't sleep at night. He is either working on his music or has friends over or is gaming. Apart from the noise, the lights are always on and I struggle to have a peaceful sleep every night. Secondly, his idea of hygiene seems to be slightly challenging to accept. In the past few months, I've never seen him wash his clothes or take a shower and carries a disturbing odour. Last but not the least, he tends to invade my private space often by checking out my clothes, books and, wallet. I have caught him red-handed thrice and warned him each time to maintain his boundaries, but he doesn't stop. I find sharing the room with Rob has become intolerable and disturbing. Hence, I would like to request a change in accommodation and would sincerely request a single occupancy room so that I can work and study in peace. I look forward to your quick and favourable response. Best Regards Anirudh Pillala
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am
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Anirudh
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Pillala
and my
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enrolment
no. is 7534. I
currently
share room # 24 with Rob Tech in Alpha Resident.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am writing this letter to bring to your notice the problems I am facing and to request a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of room.

While Rob is a well-hearted individual,
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some
of his habits and lifestyle have a disturbing impact on me and my work. One of the primary problems is that he doesn't sleep at night. He is either working on his music or has friends over or is gaming. Apart from the noise, the lights are always on and I struggle to have a peaceful sleep every night.
Secondly
, his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of hygiene seems to be
slightly
challenging
Did you mean "accepting"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to accept
. In the past few months, I've never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
him wash his clothes or take a shower and carries a disturbing
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odour
. Last
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but
not the least, he tends to invade my private space
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often
by checking out my clothes, books and, wallet. I have caught him red-handed thrice and warned him each time to maintain his boundaries,
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but
he doesn't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
.

I find sharing the room with Rob has become intolerable and disturbing.
Hence
, I would like to request a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in accommodation and would
sincerely
request a single occupancy room
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so
that I can work and study in peace.

I look forward to your quick and
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favourable
response.

Best Regards

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Anirudh
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Pillala
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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6.0
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