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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

dear sir, my name is john venigalla. I am a student in your esteemed institution. I would like to bring to your notice some accommodation related problems. i have been assigned a dormitory room along with rakesh. I find this arrangement a bit difficult to work as rakesh keeps snoring in the sleep. I find it difficult to sleep with the snoring noise. Because of this my sleep routine gets messed up. and it becomes difficult for me to concentrate on my classes during the day. and he also goes to sleep early and wakes early too. where as I am a bit of night owl. this is also creating a bit of a problem as I would keep the lights on and he can't sleep with lights on. Keeping all these things in mind I request you to assign me a new roommate or if possible assign me a different dorm. Thanking you yours sincerely john venigalla

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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

157 words

5.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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