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You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v.8

You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v. 8
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my utter dissatisfaction with my current college accommodation, mainly due to my housemate's absurd routine that severely disrupts my studies. I am hoping you would kindly allow me to move into a single room next term so that I can study properly and live harmoniously. As you know, I stay in room 625 with a roommate in our college's science block. The room is nice and spacious. However, my roommate has a wide social circle and he invites visitors almost daily, which makes the room overcrowded. Besides, he holds parties now and then, which often last till midnight or early morning. This makes impossible for me to focus on my studies. To make the situation worse, he uses my belonging even without asking and often damages them. I hope this matter will receive your immediate attention as it is seriously hampering my studies. I would appreciate if you could arrange a single room for me from the next semester as I have a habit of studying in a silent atmosphere. Thanking you in advance for your kind cooperation. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Mansoor Afzal
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my utter dissatisfaction with my
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current
college accommodation,
mainly
due to my housemate's absurd routine that
severely
disrupts my
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studies
. I am hoping you would kindly
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allow
me to
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move
into a single
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room
next
term
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so
that I can
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study
properly
and
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live
harmoniously
.

As you know, I stay in
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room
625 with a roommate in our college's science block. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
is nice and spacious.
However
, my roommate has a wide social
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circle and
he invites visitors almost daily, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
overcrowded.
Besides
, he holds parties
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now
and then, which
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often
last till midnight or early morning. This
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makes
impossible for me to focus on my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
. To
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make
the situation worse, he
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uses
my belonging even without asking and
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often
damages them.

I hope this matter will receive your immediate attention as it is
seriously
hampering my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
. I would appreciate if you could arrange a single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
for me from the
next
semester as I have a habit of studying in a silent atmosphere.

Thanking you in advance for your kind cooperation. I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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IELTS letter You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v. 8

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  American English
7 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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