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You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v.2

You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request you to allow me to move into another room, preferably to a single room, from next term as I find my current accommodation arrangement quite inconvenient. I enrolled in the B. Tech course in your college last January and currently sharing my room, 308, with a fellow mate who is also pursuing the same course. My roommate brings his friends almost every day and holds frequent parties. It not only hinders my studies but also breaches my privacy. He often borrows my things without asking and he even lost a valuable item last month. His activities are not friendly and I find it hard to concentrate on my studies due to his irrational behaviours. My father, despite his financial crunch, did arrange for my higher studies in this reputed college. It is my moral responsibility not to lose the sight of the dreams which have been conceived in the eyes of my parents. The latest incident wherein he borrowed my laptop without my permission forced me to bring these issues to your attention. In view of all these undesirable and uncomfortable situations, I once again humbly request you to allow me a new room next term, preferably a single room. Yours faithfully, Kim Neeraj
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to request you to
allow
me to
move
into another
room
,
preferably
to a single
room
, from
next
term as I find my
current
accommodation arrangement quite inconvenient.

I enrolled in the B. Tech course in your college last January and
currently
sharing my
room
, 308, with a fellow mate who is
also
pursuing the same course. My roommate brings his friends almost every day and holds frequent parties. It not
only
hinders my studies
but
also
breaches my privacy. He
often
borrows my things without
asking and
he even lost a valuable item last month. His activities are not friendly and I find it
hard
to concentrate on my studies due to his irrational
behaviours
.

My father, despite his financial crunch, did arrange for my higher studies in this reputed college. It is my moral responsibility not to lose the sight of the dreams which have
been conceived
in the eyes of my parents. The latest incident wherein he borrowed my laptop without my permission forced me to bring these issues to your attention.

In view of all these undesirable and uncomfortable situations, I once again
humbly
request you to
allow
me a new
room
next
term,
preferably
a single room.

Yours
faithfully
,

Kim
Neeraj
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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