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You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v.3

You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction and dilemmas with the current accommodation arrangement I have at my college. My roommate's absurd activities are negatively affecting my studies and I would like to move into a single room next term which completely depends on your kind permission. Although my current room is nice to live in with proper amenities, I am not satisfied with the irrational attitude and carelessness of my housemate. He has an antipathy towards cleaning the room. Moreover, he has a big social circle and invites friends to the room on a regular basis. They listen to loud music, sometimes hold parties and play computer games which create a commotion that disturbs me and interrupts my studies. Furthermore, he has a tendency to use my personal belongings without my permission. In the last few months, I have lost some of my valuables from the room and I am not sure who should I blame! I would like to live in a single room so that I can have freedom of work and study. My final exam is approaching and I want to prepare for it without any interference. I hope you would be kind enough to understand my issues related to my roommate and would arrange a new room next semester. I hope to hear a positive response from you soon. Yours faithfully, Fahad Sultan
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction and dilemmas with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
accommodation arrangement I have at my college. My roommate's absurd activities are
negatively
affecting my studies and I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
into a single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
next
term which completely depends on your kind permission.

Although my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
is nice to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in with proper amenities, I am not satisfied with the irrational attitude and carelessness of my housemate. He has an antipathy towards cleaning the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
.
Moreover
, he has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
social circle and invites friends to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
on a regular basis. They listen to loud music,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
hold parties and play computer games which create a commotion that disturbs me and interrupts my studies.
Furthermore
, he has a tendency to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
my personal belongings without my permission. In the last few months, I have lost
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of my valuables from the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
room and
I am not sure who should I blame!

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can have freedom of work and study. My final exam is approaching and I want to prepare for it without any interference. I hope you would be kind
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to understand my issues related to my roommate and would arrange a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
next
semester.

I hope to hear a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Fahad Sultan
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
231 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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