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You l8ve in a room in college whick you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangment and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accomodation officer at the college. In the letter, describe the situation, explain your priblems and why it is difficult to work, say what kind of accomodation you would prefer

You l8ve in a room in college whick you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangment and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accomodation officer at the college. In the letter, describe the situation, explain your priblems and why it is difficult to work, say what kind of accomodation you would prefer X1xA
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Marife Sacli, a forth year student taking up Bachelor Science in Pharmacy. I share a room with another student, and I am dissatisfied on how she is doing. The problem is she always invites her friends to come over and have a party almost everynight. They are messy, too loud and goes home late. I am graduating soon and I am currently doing my thesis paper which I will be passing it on this coming month. I cannot concentrate on my work. I am also having my internship in the morning until 3 o'clock in the afternoon every monday, wednesday and friday. Therefore i am tired and need a lot of rest. I would like to request if you could move me to another room and if it is not too much to ask, I would like to have a room all by myself. I will be waiting for your reply as soon as possible. Thank you. Yours sincerely, Marife Sacli
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is
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Marife
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Sacli
, a forth year student taking up Bachelor Science in Pharmacy. I share a room with another student, and I
am dissatisfied
on how she is doing. The problem is she always invites her friends to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
over and have a party almost
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everynight
. They are messy, too loud and goes home late. I am graduating
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
soon and
I am
currently
doing my thesis paper which I will be passing it on this coming month. I cannot concentrate on my work.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
also
having my internship in the morning until 3 o'clock in the afternoon every
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monday
,
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wednesday
and
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friday
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
am tired
and need
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a lot of
rest. I would like to request if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
me to another room and if it is not too much to ask, I would like to have a room all by myself. I will be waiting for your reply as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. Thank you.

Yours
sincerely
,
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Marife
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Sacli

IELTS letter You l8ve in a room in college whick you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangment and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accomodation officer at the college. In the letter, describe the situation, explain your priblems and why it is difficult to work, say what kind of accomodation you would prefer

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167 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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