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You have stayed at a friend’s house last weekend and forgot your watch there. v.2

You have stayed at a friend’s house last weekend and forgot your watch there. v. 2
Dear Dylan, Hope you are fine and enjoying the spring. I would like to thank you for a great weekend at your house. It was so exciting that I will always be grateful to you for being such a great host. I hope you can visit us soon with your wife and son and I look forward to spending some quality time together. When I got back home, I noticed that I forgot my watch at your house. My best guess is that I have left it in the bathroom. Before leaving your house I took a shower and presumably that is the time when I left it there. It is a Seiko (Japan) Automatic diver's analogue watch for men that comes with a circular dial. The strap and dial of the watch are black while the lug, buckle and bezel are silver. I am sure you will recognise it as soon as you see it. I hope it would not be a trouble for you to send it to me. I really like this wristwatch and it was a gift from Maria. She would be disappointed if I lose it. Please send it via a courier service to my home address and I will bear the courier cost. Wish to see you all soon. Warm wishes, Peter
Dear Dylan,

Hope you are fine and enjoying the spring. I would like to thank you for a great weekend at your
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house
. It was
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so
exciting that I will always be grateful to you for being such a great host. I hope you can visit us
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soon
with your wife and son and I look forward to spending
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quality time together.

When I
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got
back home, I noticed that I forgot my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
at your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. My best guess is that I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
it in the bathroom.
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Before
leaving your
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house
I took a shower and presumably
that is
the time when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
it there. It is a Seiko (Japan) Automatic diver's analogue
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watch
for
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men
that
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comes
with a circular dial. The strap and dial of the
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watch
are black while the lug, buckle and bezel are silver. I am sure you will
Possible spelling mistake. 'recognise' is British English.
recognise
it as
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soon
as you
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see
it.

I hope it would not be a trouble for you to
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send
it to me.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
really
like this wristwatch and it was a gift from Maria. She would
be disappointed
if I lose it.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
it via a courier service to my home address and I will bear the courier cost.

Wish to
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see
you all
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Warm wishes,

Peter
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have stayed at a friend’s house last weekend and forgot your watch there. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
217 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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