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An annual event was recently held in your area. Now you want to write to the organizers of this event congratulating them on a successful production. v.2

An annual event was recently held in your area. Now you want to write to the organizers of this event congratulating them on a successful production. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, As a member of the Frederick community in the city of Munich, I am writing this letter to congratulate you on a very successful production of the Folk Music Festival which is held every year in our area. I am pretty sure that other members of our community would also feel the same way. Anyway, this folk music festival takes place in our area every year, but this probably is the first time in its history that you managed to attract so many people, not only from our own city but also from many other parts of our country, with your top class advertising works. Besides, your flawless seating arrangement, top-class sound system, and the choices of music just couldn’t be any better.   However, what I really liked the most about the event that you even allowed the audience to ask different kinds of questions to the present music artists about their life and hobbies in a very friendly and casual environment. Of course, you could perhaps arrange even a bigger venue with a more spacious parking area, but, again, other than that, the whole event was simply superb. Many thanks once again. Yours faithfully, Mark Henry
Dear Sir or Madam,

As a member of the Frederick community in the city of Munich, I am writing this letter to congratulate you on a
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very
successful production of the Folk
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Music
Festival which
is held
every year in our area. I am pretty sure that other members of our community would
also
feel the same way.

Anyway, this folk
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music
festival takes place in our area every year,
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but
this
probably
is the
first
time in its history that you managed to attract
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so
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many
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people
, not
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only
from our
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own
city
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but
also
from
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many
other parts of our country, with your top
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class
advertising works.

Besides
, your flawless seating arrangement, top-
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class
sound system, and the choices of
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music
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just
couldn’t be any better.
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However
, what I
really
liked the most about the
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event
that you even
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allowed
the audience to ask
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different
kinds of questions to the present
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music
artists about their life and hobbies in a
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very
friendly and casual environment.

Of course
, you could perhaps arrange even a bigger venue with a more spacious parking area,
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but
, again, other than that, the whole
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event
was
simply
superb.

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Many
thanks once again.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mark Henry
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter An annual event was recently held in your area. Now you want to write to the organizers of this event congratulating them on a successful production. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
201 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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