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you have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. write a letter to the parents.

you have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. write a letter to the parents. QLwd3
Dear Sir/Madam I’m writing in connection with an advertisement published in GQ Australia April edition, where you have advertised about requirement of a child care specialist. I would like you to review my candidature for the said position since I hold the relevant child care experience and currently working with reputed day care shelter which specializes in providing care to kids under 10 years old. I hold a certificate in nursing and child care from Australian Child welfare society and pose rich experience in entertaining kids with knowledgeable activities which helps them build quantitative & qualitative acumen. In my current job, we have to cook basic snacks for few kids when parents are indulged in their work commitments which I think would be beneficial in the advertised position. The prime facia of this opportunity is appealing to me because of my interest in child psychology weekend programme to be hosted by Melbourne University starting next month and would last for 6 months which exactly aligns with requirements mentioned in advertisement. The programme would require me to spend 2 hours on weekends for lectures and for rest of the week, I can take up a job which would help me meet ends. For reference, I’m attaching the copies of my nursing certificate, Police verification & recommendation letter for existing employer and I look forward to receiving a positive response from you. Yours faithfully, Jim Beam
Dear Sir/Madam

I’m writing in connection with an advertisement published in
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GQ
Australia April edition, where you have advertised about requirement of a
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child
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care
specialist.

I would like you to review my candidature for the said position since I hold the relevant
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child
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care
experience and
currently
working with reputed day
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care
shelter which specializes in providing
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care
to kids under 10 years
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old
. I hold a certificate in nursing and
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child
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care
from Australian
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Child
welfare society and pose rich experience in entertaining kids with knowledgeable activities which
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helps
them build quantitative & qualitative acumen. In my
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current
job, we
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have to
cook basic snacks for few kids when parents
are indulged
in their work commitments which I
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think
would be beneficial in the advertised position. The prime
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facia
of this opportunity is appealing to me
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because
of my interest in
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child
psychology weekend
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programme
to
be hosted
by Melbourne University starting
next
month and would last for 6 months which exactly aligns with requirements mentioned in advertisement. The
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programme
would require me to spend 2 hours on weekends for lectures and for rest of the week, I can take up a job which would
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help
me
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meet
ends.

For reference, I’m attaching the copies of my nursing certificate, Police verification & recommendation letter for existing employer and I look forward to receiving a
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positive
response from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jim Beam
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IELTS letter you have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. write a letter to the parents.

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
233 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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