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You Have Seen An Advertisement In A Magazine For Someone To Live With A Family For Six Months To Look After Their Child

You Have Seen An Advertisement In A Magazine For Someone To Live With A Family For Six Months To Look After Their Child OeQ3

Dear Sir or Madam, My self shivani vyas. Last week I have seen your advertisement in very popular Australian magazine and I'm writing this letter to you about your job offer. I am requesting you please considered me for this offer. I would like to work with you which will be a great experience for you and me. I have previous experienced of looking after two children, whose ages are 3 and 5 year old. So I would be suitable for this job and I have also completed the child development course from professional organism. Australia is new country for me and there are many things to see. I would like to travelling and learning new things in my free time. I am really hardworking, patient and reliable. I would be very happy to look after your six year old child. I can assure you there will be no complain from my side and you would appreciated my work. I hope you would give me positive response and if you required any detail pls feel free to contact me. Warm Regards, Shivani

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