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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter: * explain why you think you would be suitable for the job * say what else you could do for the family * give your reasons for wanting the job

Dear Mr and Mrs Thompson, I am writing with regard to your advertisement for a Malayalam tutor. I believe that I am highly suited for this job due to my qualifications and experience teaching Malayalam. I have a master degree in Malayalam language teaching from Calicut university. In addition, I have been working as a Malayalam tutor now for five years. In addition, to teaching Malayalam I can also educate your children about Kerala culture. I believe your children would be interested to know about Kerala tradition and I could supply books if they are keen to learn this. The main reason why I am interested in this job is because it will support my current studies. I’m currently studying for my PhD and my area of interest is teaching Malayalam to non-native children. Therefore, I believe that while teaching your children I will also benefit by understanding how non-native children learn. I would appreciate discussing this with you further when time permits. Yours faithfully, Mike Wattie
Dear Mr and Mrs Thompson,

I am writing with regard to your advertisement for a Malayalam tutor.

I believe that I am
highly
suited for this job due to my qualifications and experience
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
Malayalam.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have a master degree in Malayalam language
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
from
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Calicut
university.
In addition
, I have been working as a Malayalam tutor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
for five years.

In addition
, to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
Malayalam I can
also
educate your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
about Kerala culture. I believe your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
would
be interested
to know about Kerala tradition and I could supply books if they are keen to learn this.

The main reason why I
am interested
in this job is
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because
it will support my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
studies. I’m
currently
studying for my PhD and my area of interest is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
Malayalam to non-native
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
Therefore
, I believe that while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
I will
also
benefit by understanding how non-native
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
learn.

I would appreciate discussing this with you
further
when time permits.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mike
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Wattie

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter: * explain why you think you would be suitable for the job * say what else you could do for the family * give your reasons for wanting the job

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6.0
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