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You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for three months over the summer

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Dear Sir / Madam, I want to apply for this vacancy because I found out that there is a part-time job in your ad and I think your requirements will suit me. My name is Dina Turner. I am 22 years old and am currently studying international tourism at university. I work in hotels every summer vacation and develop my theoretical and practical knowledge in a coordinated way. In addition, I can speak English fluently and even have hotel document management skills. These three months of summer would be a great practical experience and opportunity for me to work part-time at a hotel. I would also like to know if you can create temporary living conditions for hotel staff living far from the city? I would certainly be interested in hearing from you and wish to have an appointment for an interview. For your convenience I enclose my resume. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Dina Turner.
Dear Sir / Madam, I want to apply for this vacancy
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I found out that there is a part-time job in your ad and I
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think
your requirements will suit me. My name is Dina Turner. I am 22 years
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and am
currently
studying international tourism at university. I work in
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hotels
every summer vacation and develop my theoretical and practical knowledge in a coordinated way.
In addition
, I can speak English
fluently
and even have
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hotel
document management
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skills
. These three months of summer would be a great practical experience and opportunity for me to work part-time at a
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hotel
. I would
also
like to know if you can create temporary living conditions for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hotel
staff living far from the city? I would
certainly
be interested
in hearing from you and wish to have an appointment for an interview. For your convenience I enclose my resume. I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Yours
faithfully
, Dina Turner.

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for three months over the summer

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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