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you have seen an ad for weekend job a a local tour guide showing visitors around your city

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Dear Sir I'm applying for the job as a local tour guide My name is Maryam Malekian and I'm 23. I'm really interested in visiting new places and since I became a student here I would try to go around a find new places when I got a free time I accidentally saw this job need and I wonder it’s the best for me to earn some money and visit around at the same time in case I have to pay more for the university tuition fee for the next semester. I also have some experience in reverent job at the university. I've taken the first-year environment students on urban tours as an exploring trip before. I need a part-time job and this job suits me according to the experience I've got here and my interest in doing this I'm looking forward to starting this job Sincerely yours Maryam malekian
Dear Sir

I'm applying for the
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job
as a local tour guide

My name is
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Maryam
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Malekian
and I'm 23. I'm
really
interested in visiting new places and since I became a student here I would try to go around a find new places when I
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got
a free time

I
accidentally
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saw
this
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job
need and I wonder it’s the best for me to earn
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some
money and visit around at the same time in case I
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have to
pay more for the university tuition fee for the
next
semester. I
also
have
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some
experience in reverent
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job
at the university.
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I
've taken the
first
-year environment students on urban tours as an exploring trip
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before
.
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I
need a part-time
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job
and this
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job
suits me according to the experience I've
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got
here and my interest in doing this

I'm looking forward to starting this job

Sincerely
yours

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Maryam
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malekian

IELTS letter you have seen an ad for weekend job a a local tour guide showing visitors around your city

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  American English
1 paragraphs
149 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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