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Letter to an authority about a short circuit

Letter to an authority about a short circuit MlDXe
Dear sir, My name is jay dev juyal and I am writing this letter due to the unavailability of electrical supply at my house. Yesterday, rained heavily and a nearby transformer got a short circuit, after that, it was not turn on. I and neighbours notified the electrical division about the short circuit, they replied that "they will fix it by morning", it is 8 o'clock in evening now but it is still in the same condition. None of the electrical people reported here till now. We are out of electrical supply and not able to do anything at home because all our appliances are connected to electricity solely. Kindly connect with the local electrical department and sort out the issue as early as possible. To go to a higher authority will be my next stage and a complaint will be registered against both of the sections. Thanks
Dear sir,

My name is jay dev
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juyal and
I am writing this letter due to the unavailability of
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electrical
supply at my
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house
. Yesterday, rained
heavily
and a nearby transformer
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got
a short circuit, after that, it was not turn on.

I and
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neighbours
notified the
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electrical
division about the short circuit, they replied that
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"
they will
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fix
it by morning
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"
, it is 8 o'clock in evening
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now
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but
it is
still
in the same condition. None of the
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electrical
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people
reported here till
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now
. We are out of
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electrical
supply and not able to do anything at home
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because
all our appliances
are connected
to electricity
solely
.

Kindly connect with the local
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electrical
department and sort out the issue as early as possible. To go to a higher authority will be my
next
stage and a complaint will
be registered
against both of the sections.

Thanks

IELTS letter Letter to an authority about a short circuit

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
147 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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