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You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. v.2

You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. v. 2
Dear Kathy, Hope you are doing well. It's been long since we have last met. I am writing to let you know that I have recently changed my job and I really like it. I hope we would be able to meet soon and spend some exciting time together. Though I was professionally satisfied with my previous job, it was hard for me to balance my professional and personal life. Long working hours were not allowing me to get some time for myself. Moreover, I was looking for an opportunity which would allow me to grow in people management area along with technical skills. The new company offers both. I am responsible for the project delivery and I lead a team of eight people. I am truly excited about this new role. I would also like to inform you that I have finally purchased a car. It is a second-hand car, however, it is in good condition. I enjoy a daily drive to work. No more today. Please convey my regards to your family. I look forward to knowing what you are doing these days. Please write me back at your convenience. Warm wishes, Naaz
Dear Kathy,

Hope you are doing well. It's been long since we have last met. I am writing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I have recently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
my job and I
really
like it. I hope we would be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
and spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
exciting time together.

Though I was
professionally
satisfied with my previous job, it was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for me to balance my professional and personal life. Long working hours were not allowing me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time for myself.
Moreover
, I was looking for an opportunity which would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to grow in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
management area along with technical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. The new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
offers both. I am responsible for the project delivery and I lead a team of eight
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. I am
truly
excited about this new role.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would
also
like to inform you that I have
finally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a car. It is a second-hand car,
however
, it is in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
condition. I enjoy a daily drive to work. No more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
convey my regards to your family.

I look forward to knowing what you are doing these days.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
write me back at your convenience.

Warm wishes,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Naaz
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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