Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You have recently bought air conditioner and it doesn't work properly

You have recently bought air conditioner and it doesn't work properly gY6nL
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to complain about the air conditioner which I recently bought from your store. On the 5th of June I visited one of your local shop in order to buy an air conditioner for my home. Looking around the shop I encountered expected item and I asked a sales assistant about it. After getting all necessary information I decided to purchase it. Three days later things started to go wrong. When I used the conditioner for the first time it worked properly and cooled the room very quickly. However, after two days when I turned the air conditioner on it started to blow hot air. I tried to adjust the air degree but the remote control did not work either. I would like you to replace the air conditioner with well functioning one. I expect to receive the same type of unit and brand. Otherwise, unfortunately I will be forced to report this Customer Service Association responsible for this problem. I look forward to receiving a reply. Yours faithfully, Ben Hopkins
Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to complain about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
conditioner which I recently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
from your store. On the 5th of June I visited one of your local shop in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
conditioner for my home. Looking around the shop I encountered
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
item and I asked a sales assistant about it.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
getting all necessary information I decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
it. Three days later things
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to go
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
. When I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
the conditioner for the
first
time it worked
properly
and cooled the room
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
quickly
.
However
, after two days when I turned the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
conditioner on it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to blow hot
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
. I tried to adjust the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
degree
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the remote control did not work either. I would like you to replace the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
conditioner with well functioning one.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
to receive the same type of unit and brand.
Otherwise
, unfortunately I will
be forced
to report this Customer Service Association responsible for this problem. I look forward to receiving a reply. Yours
faithfully
, Ben
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Hopkins

IELTS letter You have recently bought air conditioner and it doesn't work properly

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • You have recently bought air conditioner and it doesn't work properly