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You have noticed a room at your company office that can be used as a relaxation room. Write a letter to your manager and ask to use the room for this purpose.

You have noticed a room at your company office that can be used as a relaxation room. Write a letter to your manager and ask to use the room for this purpose. B11V
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to you in regard to vacant room in our office which can be used as a relaxation room for the staff as it will help everybody to re-energize themselves during break which will improve their effectiveness and efficiency in their work. It will reduce their fatigue which is due constant work. The room is 421 right beside the meeting room as it is better place to relax because nobody goes there often and it is very quiet place which gives person a quite different experience. In order to use this room, it does not require much changes as everything are already there, we just need to clean that up beside that some decoration inside the room needed particularly on the walls because the walls are bit faded due to lack of maintenance. I hope you will like my idea and you will consider on this very soon. Yours Sincerely Ryan
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to you in regard to vacant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
in our office which can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as a relaxation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
for the staff as it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
everybody to re-energize themselves during break which will
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improve
their effectiveness and efficiency in their work. It will
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reduce
their fatigue which is due constant work.

The
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room
is 421 right beside the meeting
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room
as it is better place to relax
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because
nobody goes there
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often
and it is
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very
quiet place which gives person a quite
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different
experience.

In order to
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use
this
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room
, it does not require
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much
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changes
as everything are already there, we
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just
need to clean that up beside that
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some
decoration inside the
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room
needed
particularly
on the walls
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because
the walls are
Consider using a past participle here: "bitten".
bit
faded due to lack of maintenance. I hope you will like my
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idea
and you will consider on this
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very
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soon
.

Yours
Sincerely


Ryan
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IELTS letter You have noticed a room at your company office that can be used as a relaxation room. Write a letter to your manager and ask to use the room for this purpose.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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