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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend . In your letter 1. explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday 2. describe some possible disadvantages 3. say whether you would like to got camping with your friend this summer.

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1. explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday 2. describe some possible disadvantages 3. say whether you would like to got camping with your friend this summer. YLyQd
Dear Mary, I'm just writing to let you know about some of my suggestions about the camping trip to Mustang that you're planning to go to. I'm glad to hear that you're finally trying to be adventurous. I'm sure that you'll enjoy this trekking to the mountains tremendously. The paths involve all the sight-seeing of rivers, forests, animals and birds. I know you; you have always been an avid nature-lover so you'll probably enjoy relaxing in the lap of nature. You'll also love the fresh foods prepared in the local restaurants, especially one special cuisine called as "Mustang aloo", which is one of my favorites. I do love the cold weather there but it might be a bit harsh for you since you've always been staying in the sunny weather in Florida. If you wear the proper clothing as per the season, you'll do just fine. The hiking could be extremely tiring for you as you're not accustomed to it. It would be a good plan to get some walking and climbing done 2-3 months beforehand. I'll be free this summer so if you want, I can join you in this camping holiday. It'll be fun to finally meet you after a long time. Can you believe that it's been 5 years that we've not met? I'll be over the moon to finally catch up with you. Hope to see you this summer! See you soon. Sherina
Dear Mary,

I'm
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of my suggestions about the camping trip to Mustang that you're planning to go to. I'm glad to hear that you're
finally
trying to be adventurous.

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'm sure that
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you'll
enjoy this trekking to the mountains
tremendously
. The paths involve all the sight-seeing of rivers, forests, animals and birds. I know you; you have always been an avid nature-lover
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so
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you'll
probably
enjoy relaxing in the lap of nature.
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You'll
also
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love
the fresh foods prepared in the local restaurants,
especially
one special cuisine called as
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Mustang
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aloo
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, which is one of my favorites.

I do
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love
the
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weather there
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but
it might be a bit harsh for you since you've always been staying in the sunny weather in Florida. If you wear the proper clothing as per the season,
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you'll
do
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fine. The hiking could be
extremely
tiring for you as you're not accustomed to it. It would be a
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good
plan to
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get
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walking and climbing done 2-3 months beforehand.

I'll be free this summer
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so
if you want, I can
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join
you in this camping holiday. It'll be fun to
finally
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meet
you after a long time. Can you believe that it's been 5 years that we've not met? I'll be over the moon to
finally
catch up with you. Hope to
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see
you this summer!

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See
you
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soon
.

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Sherina
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IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1. explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday 2. describe some possible disadvantages 3. say whether you would like to got camping with your friend this summer.

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  American English
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236 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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