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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job E3LEQ
Dear John, It is been long time since we saw each other. I hope you are doing well. I just wanted to let you know that I will be coming to New York for my higher studies in Business Management at St. Clair College of Business Studies.  I will be studying Full-Time in this Program and will be free on the weekends. So, I am planning to work part-time on the weekends to manage my living expenses rental. Also, I will need some savings to pay my semester fees as my family is already going through tough financials. I will be sending you my resume with all the details including preferred locations of work. I was wondering if you can forward my CV to your manager for any part-time vacancies, it will be a great help. I look forward to hearing from you. Best regards, David
Dear John, It
is been
long time since we
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saw
each other. I hope you are doing well. I
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just
wanted to
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let
you know that I will be coming to New York for my higher studies in Business Management at St. Clair College of Business Studies.  
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will be studying Full-Time in this Program and will be free on the weekends.
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So
, I am planning to work part-time on the weekends to manage my living expenses rental.
Also
, I will need
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some
savings to pay my semester fees as my family is already going through tough financials. I will be sending you my resume with all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
including preferred locations of work. I was wondering if you can forward my CV to your manager for any part-time vacancies, it will be a great
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help
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing from you. Best regards,
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David
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IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
145 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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