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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation BrYm
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter since I found some information about my hometown provided in your magazine was inaccurate. In the article about Shenzhen, a modern city in China, you introduced the population, famous tourism, typical local food and culture of Shenzhen. However, the population data was outdated, there are more than 100, 000 people living in Shenzhen now. Besides, regarding to the delicious food, Kung Pao Chicken is a Sichuan cuisine instead of a Shenzhen dish. I think it is critical for your magazine to verify the information provided and always tell readers the truth. I have been a keen reader of your magazine, and I always plan for my vacation and make decision about where to go based on your magazine. However, wrong information will be misleading. When readers find out the information is incorrect, they may not trust the magazine anymore. I hope you could resolve this issue and I would suggest you to the correct the information in your magazine released next month. Looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Lily Huang
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter since I found
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information
about my hometown provided in your
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magazine
was inaccurate. In the article about Shenzhen, a modern city in China, you introduced the population,
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famous
tourism, typical local food and culture of Shenzhen.
However
, the population data
was outdated
, there are more than 100, 000
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people
living in Shenzhen
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Chicken is a Sichuan cuisine
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it is critical for your
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magazine
to verify the
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information
provided and always
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tell
readers the truth. I have been a keen reader of your
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magazine
, and I always plan for my vacation and
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make
decision about where to go based on your
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magazine
.
However
,
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wrong
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information
will be misleading. When readers find out the
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information
is incorrect, they may not trust the
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magazine
anymore.

I hope you could resolve this issue and I would suggest you to the correct the
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information
in your
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magazine
released
next
month.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

Lily Huang
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IELTS letter You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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  American English
7 paragraphs
179 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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