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You have been working in a company for the last two years. Recently, your computer in the office has started giving some problems and it is affecting your work performance. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the problem, explain how it is affecting your work, write what you want him to do regarding it

You have been working in a company for the last two years. Recently, your computer in the office has started giving some problems and it is affecting your work performance. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the problem, explain how it is affecting your work, write what you want him to do regarding it 7XDn
Dear Mr Wayne, I understand that you probably do not want to hear about another issue amid so many other problems, but I just do not have any other option but to inform it to you. The problem, I am talking about, is related to my desktop computer which I have been working with for last one year so. In fact, my computer is giving me trouble on and off for more than a month as it keeps freezing on me momentarily, forcing me to stop my work until it comes back again. Sometimes, my computer becomes so hot that I become little afraid to even touch it after working on it for a bit longer period of time. Needless to say, it is also running out of memory since many software have been installed in it over the years, which is actually making the machine run even slower. Naturally, because of these reasons, the productivity at my work is getting affected rather negatively. Therefore, I would really appreciate it if you take proper steps to arrange to have a technician to fix my computer at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely, Rob Freeman
Dear Mr Wayne,

I understand that you
probably
do not want to hear about another issue amid
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so
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many
other problems,
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but
I
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just
do not have any other option
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but
to inform it to you. The problem, I am talking about,
is related
to my desktop computer which I have been working with for last one year
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so
.

In fact, my computer is giving me trouble on and off for more than a month as it
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keeps
freezing on me
momentarily
, forcing me to
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stop
my work until it
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comes
back again.
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Sometimes
, my computer becomes
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so
hot that I become
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little
afraid to even touch it after working on it for a bit longer period of time. Needless to say, it is
also
running out of memory since
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many software
have
been installed
in it over the years, which is actually making the machine run even slower.

Naturally
,
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because
of these reasons, the productivity at my work is getting
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affected
rather
negatively
.
Therefore
, I would
really
appreciate it if you take proper steps to arrange to have a technician to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
my computer at your earliest convenience.

Yours
sincerely
,

Rob Freeman
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IELTS letter You have been working in a company for the last two years. Recently, your computer in the office has started giving some problems and it is affecting your work performance. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the problem, explain how it is affecting your work, write what you want him to do regarding it

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