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The local government is planning to change the bus timetable. You are not happy about the proposed changes. You have decided to write about it to the editor of a local newspaper. v.2

The local government is planning to change the bus timetable. You are not happy about the proposed changes. You have decided to write about it to the editor of a local newspaper. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a regular reader of your newspaper, and I also like how you and your newspaper take bold efforts to bring out many issues into the light, which our hometown faces from time to time. And, I am writing this letter to you in order to express my dissatisfaction over a local government's proposal to chang the existing bus timetable. In fact, such changes in bus schedule would severely affect me personally as well as many others like me since we won’t be able to catch our on time in order to arrive at our work. By the way, before the schedule changes, I could catch my bus at 8 am, but the same bus would pass by my house at 9 am now. Besides, according to the new bus timetable, I and many peole in my community wouldn’t be able to commute to other places in any buses since they now stop at some other bus stoppages, which are quite far away from our houses. So, I would really like to request to the local government through your newspaper not to change the bus schedule while actually improving the services by having more frequent bus services and comfortable seats. Yours faithfully, Peter Cox
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a regular reader of your newspaper, and I
also
like how you and your newspaper take bold efforts to bring out
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many
issues into the light, which our hometown faces from time to time. And, I am writing this letter to you in order to express my dissatisfaction over a local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's proposal to
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chang
the existing bus timetable.

In fact, such
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changes
in bus schedule would
severely
affect me
personally
as well
as
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many
others like me since we won’t be able to catch our on time in order to arrive at our work. By the way,
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before
the schedule
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changes
, I could catch my bus at 8 am,
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but
the same bus would pass by my
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house
at 9 am
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now
.
Besides
, according to the new bus timetable, I and
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many
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peole
in my community wouldn’t be able to commute to other places in any buses since they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
at
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some
other bus stoppages, which are quite far away from our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
.

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So
, I would
really
like to request to the local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
through your newspaper not to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
the bus schedule while actually improving the services by having more frequent bus services and comfortable seats.

Yours
faithfully
,

Peter Cox
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter The local government is planning to change the bus timetable. You are not happy about the proposed changes. You have decided to write about it to the editor of a local newspaper. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
208 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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