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You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course.

You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. OkAy
Dear Mr Smith, I am Anmol from your evening virtual training course. I am writing in regards to quit my classes for now. I am working in a restaurant in customer service and due to this pandemic going on, my shifts were cut down but as everything is opening again, I need to go there own daily basics. My schedule will go to be very busy and I barely have time to relax and doing leisure activities as well. I would have no time for this course despite the fact that I genuinely worked hard on it during the whole summer. Not only this, I am not financially stable to afford the fees and buy some books. I am thinking to quit it for a very short term and would like to rejoin it next summer. I hope I will get the funds back which was collected to go on the class trip because it is hard for me to go there. Looking for your response. Yours Sincerely, Anmolpreeet
Dear Mr Smith,

I am
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Anmol
from your evening virtual training course. I am writing
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
quit my classes for
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now
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am working in a restaurant in customer service and due to this pandemic going on, my shifts were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down
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but
as everything is opening again, I need to go there
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own
daily basics.

My schedule will go to be
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very
busy and I
barely
have time to relax and doing leisure activities
as well
. I would have no time for this course despite the fact that I
genuinely
worked
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hard
on it during the whole summer. Not
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only
this, I am not
financially
stable to afford the fees and
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buy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
books.

I am thinking to quit it for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
short term and would like to rejoin it
next
summer. I hope I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the funds back which
was collected
to go on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
trip
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for me to go there.

Looking for your response.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Anmolpreeet

IELTS letter You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
168 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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