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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course kPdN
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my great interest in enrolling the computer course in Simon Fraser University although I haven't complete an elementary course. In this letter, I will explain why. I understand that this is an advanced course, and it is designed for people who have complteted an elementary course. However, I have been always interested in studying computer as it's an essential skill to have nowadays. I have been watching videos online to learn the basic skills and practicing by using Java program. I kindly ask for a special exception for me so I can enroll in this course. Becuase I have been self-studying for 12 months, and I know how to build a simple website by using Java. On the other hand, I beleive I can catch up on the course since I am planning to be a full-time student. Thank you in advance for your assistance, and look forward to hearing back from you. Warm Regards, Annabel
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my great interest in enrolling the computer
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course
in Simon Fraser University although I haven't complete an elementary
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course
. In this letter, I will
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explain
why.

I understand that this is an advanced
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course
, and it
is designed
for
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people
who have
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complteted
an elementary
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course
.
However
, I
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have been always
interested in studying computer as it's an essential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
to have nowadays. I have been watching videos online to learn the basic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and practicing by using Java program.

I kindly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
a special exception for me
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so
I can enroll in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
.
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Becuase
I have been self-studying for 12 months, and I know how to build a simple website by using Java.
On the other hand
, I
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beleive
I can catch up on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
since I am planning to be a full-time student.

Thank you in advance for your assistance, and look forward to hearing back from you.

Warm Regards,

Annabel

IELTS letter Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

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