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You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. v.2

You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a fan of your TV channel because of the quality of the programs and the excellent shows you broadcast most of the time. But, lately, some of the programs, which are being aired during the evening time, are becoming monotonous and sub-standard, to say the least. So, I thought that it was time for me to write this letter to you to request you to change some of the evening programs and introduce some exciting and absorbing programs instead. By the way, the TV programs, including some random cooking shows, talk shows and foreign language learning, in the evening are targeted for only some certain groups of audiences, and they are not interesting for general viewers at all. Now, while I don’t have much of an issue to watch such programs once in a while, I would be more interested to watch some famous comedy shows, documentaries on different kinds of wildlife, science fiction movies and travel shows also at the same time. I think that such diversities in your evening TV programs would prove out to be better since it would attract many more audiences for your TV channel while also generating more advertising revenues for it at the same time. I hope you will consider my suggestions and bring our some changes in your evening programs. Yours faithfully, Robinson Duke
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a fan of your TV channel
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because
of the quality of the
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programs
and the excellent
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shows
you broadcast most of the
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time
.
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But
, lately,
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some of the
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programs
, which are
being aired
during the evening
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time
, are becoming monotonous and sub-standard, to say the least.
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So
, I
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thought
that it was
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time
for me to write this letter to you to request you to
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change
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some of the
evening
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programs
and introduce
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some
exciting and absorbing
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programs
instead
.

By the way, the TV
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programs
, including
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some
random cooking
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shows
, talk
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shows
and foreign language learning, in the evening
are targeted
for
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only
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some
certain groups of audiences, and they are not interesting for general viewers at all.

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Now
, while I don’t have much of an issue to
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watch
such
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programs
once in a while, I would be more interested to
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watch
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some
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famous
comedy
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shows
, documentaries on
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different
kinds of wildlife, science fiction movies and travel
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shows
also
at the same
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time
. I
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think
that such diversities in your evening TV
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
would prove out to be better since it would attract
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many
more audiences for your TV channel while
also
generating more advertising revenues for it at the same time.

I hope you will consider my suggestions and bring our
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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changes
in your evening programs.

Yours
faithfully
,

Robinson Duke
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
227 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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