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You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. v.1

You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regards to the evening programs which are currently being telecast on your TV channel. As per the current schedule of the evening slot, most of the programs are boring and unexciting. It would be great if you can reschedule some of these programs and introduce more exciting and absorbing programs in the evening time. Most of these programs of the evening slot are in the category of soap opera and the target audiences are mostly adult women. If this slot had more family entertainment programs like comedy, magic show, reality show, children-oriented programs, or documentaries, it would have been more captivating for audiences of all ages. I believe by introducing this variety of programs into the evening slot, your channel can attract more viewers and well as advertisers. Since audiences of a specific age group enjoy your evening programs, you must be missing some advertising opportunities. Evening time in each family is considered to be the reunion time. Children join their parents after completing a long day in school and in the same way parents also return home after a tiring day in office. So every member of the family prefers being in the living room in the evening as their meeting place and the television is their medium for relaxation and entertainment. Now if your channel can telecast my proposed list of programs, it will cover the interest of everyone in the family. I hope my request is valid and logical enough to draw your attention. Please reconsider your current evening programmes which are being broadcast. Yours faithfully, Nilay Das
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
the evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
which are
currently
being telecast on your TV channel. As per the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
schedule of the evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
slot
, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
are boring and unexciting. It would be great if you can reschedule
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
and introduce more exciting and absorbing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
in the evening time.

Most of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
of the evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
slot
are in the category of soap opera and the target audiences are
mostly
adult women. If this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
slot
had more family entertainment
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
like comedy, magic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
, reality
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
, children-oriented
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
, or documentaries, it would have been more captivating for audiences of all ages. I believe by introducing this variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
into the evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
slot
, your channel can attract more viewers and well as advertisers. Since audiences of a specific age group enjoy your evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
, you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be missing
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some
advertising opportunities.

Evening time in each family
is considered
to be the reunion time. Children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
their parents after completing a long day in school and
in the same way
parents
also
return home after a tiring day in office.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
every member of the family prefers being in the living room in the evening as their meeting place and the television is their medium for relaxation and entertainment.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
if your channel can telecast my proposed list of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
, it will cover the interest of everyone in the family.

I hope my request is valid and logical
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to draw your attention.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
reconsider your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
evening
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
which are being broadcast.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Nilay
Possible spelling mistake found.
Das
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
268 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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