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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunch time. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine.

You eat at your college cafeteria every lunch time. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. NrRnj
Dear Sir, I am Snehal Patel studying in second year of Bachelors of engineering from the college. I have been visiting the cafeteria daily during lunch time. I think there can be an improvement in it which I like to be published in our college magazine. I have been a regular customer of our cafeteria from the first day of my college. The food is very delicious and staff is very friendly and co-operative. However, I think there is a scope of improvement in increasing the number of tables in the cafeteria as most of the time it is crowded and students have to wait for 15-20 minutes for their turn. Also the interior of the cafeteria seems to be quite old as it is not renovated after it is being functional. As per my observation the number of tables can be increased by reducing the open space in the cafeteria and accomodate more tables. This will also require to re-arranage the interior design to have space for this new table arrangements, they also need to do new colour to the walls and add some artwork on the wall to give it new life. Looking forward to having this published in our college magazine. Yours faithfully, Snehal
Dear Sir,

I am
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Snehal
Patel studying in second year of Bachelors of engineering from the college. I have been visiting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
daily during
This word is normally spelled as one.
lunch time
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
there can be an improvement in it which I like to
be published
in our college magazine.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have been a regular customer of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
from the
first
day of my college. The food is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
delicious and staff is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
friendly and co-operative.
However
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
there is a scope of improvement in increasing the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tables
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
as most of the time it
is crowded
and students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
wait for 15-20 minutes for their turn.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
the interior of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
seems to be quite
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
as it is not renovated after it is being functional.

As per my observation the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tables
can
be increased
by reducing the open space in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
and
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accomodate
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tables
. This will
also
require to
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re-arranage
the interior design to have space for this new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
table
arrangements, they
also
need to do new
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colour
to the walls and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
artwork on the wall to give it new life.

Looking forward to having this published in our college magazine.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Snehal
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IELTS letter You eat at your college cafeteria every lunch time. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine.

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