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A descriptive composition to complaint the Highview English course.

A descriptive composition to complaint the Highview English course. WyXxa

Dear Sir and Madam, I am writing to notify you of my dissatisfaction with one course of your school. I enrolled in this photography course last week. Unfortunately, there is a gap between what you claim to offer and the actual quality of the class. First of all, the class was oversized, and there were 16 people in fact. In addition, the teaching method is another problem. It is important for green hands to practice more while the teacher required us to learn basic theoretical knowledge by the route. Therefore, I would like to propose my expectation for your course. The class size should be guaranteed, as suggested by the pamphlet. And perhaps the teacher could put greater emphasis on practicing photography rather than learning it by heart. I'm looking forward to developments in the course. Yours faithfully, Mary

Dear Sir and Madam,

I am writing to notify you of my dissatisfaction with one course of your school.

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important
 for green hands to practice more while the teacher required us to learn basic theoretical knowledge by the route.

Therefore
, I would like to propose my expectation for your course. The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 size should be guaranteed
, as suggested by the pamphlet. And perhaps the teacher could put greater emphasis on practicing photography rather
 than learning it by heart.

I'm looking forward to developments in the course.

Yours faithfully
,

Mary

IELTS letter A descriptive composition to complaint the Highview English course.

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

138 words

This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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