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You coach an amateur football team. Write a letter to a local school requesting permission to use their facilities and explaining why your team cannot find facilities elsewhere. Suggest how this may be arranged so that your team’s training will not interfere with school activities.

You coach an amateur football team. Write a letter to a local school requesting permission to use their facilities and explaining why your team cannot find facilities elsewhere. Suggest how this may be arranged so that your team’s training will not interfere with school activities. almRm
Dear Mr. Nguyen, I am writing on behalf of the KFC football team to request your permission to utilize the facilities at your school for training purposes. To achieve the best result in the Southern Football League, which takes place on August 14th, we started intensive training two weeks ago in a local sports complex. However, that the pitch is currently under repair has required us to find another spot with good facilities and reasonable rent to maintain our practice. After discussing thoroughly, we have reached a consensus that your school might fulfill our requirements. Therefore, we expect to be permitted to use your facilities in a month. Regarding the possibility that our training may engender interruption to your school activities, we can guarantee that it will hardly ever occur. We intend to utilize your facilities out of school hours; therefore, our training will not hinder your students from getting access to those activities. Moreover, we would like to offer certain suggestions on how such permission will be of benefit to your school. First, observing my players practising on your football playground could be a motivation to your students, thereby helping you promote sport activities at school. Furthermore, being a coach with the responsibility of cultivating sports talents, I hope to collaborate with you in seeking promising students and developing their potential properly. This collaboration is a good chance to manifest your care for students’ development, which will contribute to generating positive publicity. Thank you in anticipation of your kind cooperation. Yours sincerely, Hoa.
Dear Mr. Nguyen,

I am writing on behalf of the KFC football team to request your permission to utilize the facilities at your
school
for
training
purposes.

To achieve the best result in the Southern Football League, which takes place on August 14th, we
started
intensive
training
two weeks ago in a local sports complex.
However
, that the pitch is
currently
under repair has required us to find another spot with
good
facilities and reasonable rent to maintain our practice. After discussing
thoroughly
, we have reached a consensus that your
school
might fulfill our requirements.
Therefore
, we
expect
to
be permitted
to
use
your facilities in a month.

Regarding the possibility that our
training
may engender interruption to your
school
activities, we can guarantee that it will hardly ever occur. We intend to utilize your facilities out of
school
hours;
therefore
, our
training
will not hinder your
students
from getting access to those activities.

Moreover
, we would like to offer certain suggestions on how such permission will be of benefit to your
school
.
First
, observing my players
practising
on your football playground could be a motivation to your
students
, thereby helping you promote sport activities at
school
.
Furthermore
, being a coach with the responsibility of cultivating sports talents, I hope to collaborate with you in seeking promising
students
and developing their potential
properly
. This collaboration is a
good
chance to manifest your care for
students’
development, which will contribute to generating
positive
publicity.

Thank you in anticipation of your kind cooperation.

Yours
sincerely
,

Hoa
.
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IELTS letter You coach an amateur football team. Write a letter to a local school requesting permission to use their facilities and explaining why your team cannot find facilities elsewhere. Suggest how this may be arranged so that your team’s training will not interfere with school activities.

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  American English
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254 words
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