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You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. v.4

You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. v. 4
Dear Paul, Hope you are doing fine and things are good at your side. Anyway, if I remember correctly when we were talking a few weeks ago, you expressed your interest to go to a music concert of "Living Loud" band if time permits. I think here is your chance to go to a concert by this music band and they will rock the fans at Trivision Stadium in the evening of 27th May. You would be glad to know that I am going to offer you the ticket for this music concert. Actually, I bought this ticket for myself, but, unfortunately, after a few days of purchasing that ticket, one of my cousins requested me to visit his hometown and not to mention, of course, I decided to accompany him to stay at his hometown for a couple of days. But that would also mean that my concert ticket would go wasted as our timing to travel intersects the concert schedule. So, I am offering this ticket to you and I hope you will enjoy the concert. Please visit anytime at my home and meet me at the college library so that I can hand over the ticket to you. Warm wishes, Lucas
Dear Paul,

Hope you are doing fine and things are
good
at your side. Anyway, if I remember
correctly
when we were talking a few weeks ago, you expressed your interest to go to a music
concert
of
"
Living Loud
"
band if time permits. I
think
here is your chance to go to a
concert
by this music
band and
they will rock the fans at
Trivision
Stadium in the evening of 27th May.

You would be glad to know that I am going to offer you the
ticket
for this music
concert
. Actually, I
bought
this
ticket
for myself,
but
, unfortunately, after a few days of purchasing that
ticket
, one of my cousins requested me to visit his hometown and not to mention,
of course
, I decided to accompany him to stay at his hometown for a couple of days.
But
that would
also
mean that my
concert
ticket
would go wasted as our timing to travel intersects the
concert
schedule.

So
, I am offering this
ticket
to you and I hope you will enjoy the
concert
.
Please
visit anytime at my home and
meet
me at the college library
so
that I can hand over the
ticket
to you.

Warm wishes,

Lucas
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. v. 4

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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