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You are working at an international company and recently your responsibilities have changed and you think more training is required. Write to your boss saying How your job has changed Describing the training you need Suggesting how training could be done efficiently

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Dear Mr Smirnov, I am Mariya Vlassova from the cartographic department and have been working for our company as GIS-analyst since 2016. Recently, I was promoted to the Head of the department with a crew of 30 people in it. As a result, my load of responsibilities is significantly increased. Today, I am in charge of not only a couple of projects but also I have to manage and coordinate all projects of the department, which requires great management skills. Even though I have all necessary skills for my new role, after 2 weeks of my promotion I have realized that I am not particularly sure how to reduce risk of some important decisions that have to be made on a daily basis. In my opinion, it will be highly effective and useful if I attend a short intensive course in New York business school that was specially designed for acquiring management skills such as risk assessment and decision-making skills. Thank you in advance for your attention to this matter. Yours faithfully, Mariya V
Dear Mr
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Smirnov
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I am
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Mariya
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Vlassova
from the cartographic department and have been working for our
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company
as GIS-analyst since 2016. Recently, I
was promoted
to the Head of the department with a crew of 30
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people
in it.
As a result
, my load of responsibilities is
significantly
increased.
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Today
, I am in charge of not
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only
a couple of projects
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but
also
I
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have to
manage and coordinate all projects of the department, which requires great management
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skills
.

Even though
I have all necessary
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skills
for my new role, after 2 weeks of my promotion I have realized that I am not
particularly
sure how to
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reduce
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risk
of
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some
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important
decisions that
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have to
be made
on a daily basis.

In my opinion, it will be
highly
effective and useful if I attend a short intensive course in New York business school that was
specially
designed for acquiring management
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skills
such as
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risk
assessment and decision-making
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skills
.

Thank you in advance for your attention to this matter.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Mariya
V
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IELTS letter You are working at an international company and recently your responsibilities have changed and you think more training is required. Write to your boss saying How your job has changed Describing the training you need Suggesting how training could be done efficiently

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6.0
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