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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Manager, My name is Katerine Saavedra, i am a member of the group of musicians who practices in the community hall. We are a classical music group, who helps in church's celebration every sunday, all 10 members of this group are young women from the Catolic School. As i mentioned before this group participates and help in church's service once a week; with the intention to share our melodies and create a beautiful environment in the participants, we have been receive a lot support and appretiation for this community since we started. I would like to suggest if is possible to use this space at least every saturday from 5pm to 8pm, because at this time the place is empty and quiet, or another day but at the same time. It is the only time that everyone can practice in the group. Please let us know your decision Kindly Regards. kate Saavedra
Dear Manager,

My name is
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Katerine
Saavedra,
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am a member of the
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of musicians who practices in the community hall. We are a classical music
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, who
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helps
in church's celebration every
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sunday
, all 10 members of this
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group
are young women from the
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Catolic
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mentioned
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participates and
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help
in church's service once a week; with the intention to share our melodies and create a
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beautiful
environment in the participants, we have been
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receive
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and
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appretiation
for this community since we
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started
.

I would like to suggest if is possible to
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use
this space at least every
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saturday
from 5pm to 8pm,
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at the same time. It is the
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only
time that everyone can practice in the group.

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us know your decision

Kindly Regards.

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kate
Saavedra
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IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

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