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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Sir/Madam, I, Deepika from the music band 'Green Trends' would like to discuss the memo we received yesterday, which states that the community hall is no longer available for us to practise. First of all, kindly allow me to introduce our musicians and how we are different from others. We are a group of five people with different occupation; however, we joined hands to spread awareness about environmental-related issues such as deforestation, global warming, and so on through our lyrics and music. We believe that by songs we can easily create awareness among the people and educate the children on the importance of saving the mother earth. Besides, we usually perform at localities having poor surroundings to teach and support the residents of the community to fight against the environmental issues. We usually meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice, but we can change it to Wednesday and Thursday evenings from 7 PM to 9 PM. I will be waiting to hear a positive response from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Deepika
Dear Sir/Madam,

I, Deepika from the music band 'Green Trends' would like to discuss the memo we received yesterday, which states that the community hall is no longer available for us to
practise
.

First of all
, kindly
allow
me to introduce our musicians and how we are
different
from others. We are a group of five
people
with
different
occupation;
however
, we
joined
hands to spread awareness about environmental-related issues such as deforestation, global warming, and
so
on through our lyrics and music.

We believe that by songs we can
easily
create awareness among the
people
and educate the children on the importance of saving the mother earth.
Besides
, we
usually
perform at localities having poor surroundings to teach and support the residents of the community to fight against the environmental issues.

We
usually
meet
on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice,
but
we can
change
it to Wednesday and Thursday evenings from 7 PM to 9 PM. I will be waiting to hear a
positive
response from you
soon
.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Deepika
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IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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