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you are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club . In your letter introduce yourself,explain what experience and special skills you have ,tell him/her when you think you could start.

you are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter introduce yourself, explain what experience and special skills you have, tell him/her when you think you could start. 7MKn
Dear sir, I am Methew, a retired games teacher of government senior secondary school. I have seen your advertisement of vacant vacancy in local newspaper. I have a keen interest in football so, I would like to join your esteemed organization as a part time job. Although, I had completed my 50 year's job as a teacher for developing players in a school, yet, I am an eager beaver to spend my other few years in football club. Consequently, I hope you will be glad to give an opportunity to be a part of your club, as I have an experience of 38 years in this particular field and I had also won several prizes at state as well as national level in university period. I have an abundance knowledge about theoratical and practical experience of this sports. I would prefer to begin my work from coming Monday if, you would permit me to join your club. I shall be great thankful to you for this act of kindness. Look forward to your reply. Yours Faithfully, Methew
Dear sir,

I am
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Methew
, a retired
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "games'" or "game's"?
games
teacher of
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government
senior secondary school. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
your
The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
advertisement of
vacant vacancy in local newspaper.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have a keen interest in football
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
your esteemed organization as a
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
job.

Although, I had completed my 50 year's job as a teacher for developing players in a school,
yet
, I am an eager beaver to spend my other few years in football club.
Consequently
, I hope you will be glad to give an opportunity to be a part of your club, as I have an experience of 38 years in this particular field and I had
also
won several prizes at state
as well
as national level in university period. I have an abundance knowledge about
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theoratical
and practical experience of
Did you mean "these"?
this
sports.

I would prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
my work from coming Monday if, you would permit me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
your club.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
shall be great thankful to you for this act of kindness.

Look forward to your reply.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Methew
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IELTS letter you are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter introduce yourself, explain what experience and special skills you have, tell him/her when you think you could start.

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7 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
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