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You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have tell him/her when you think you could start

You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have tell him/her when you think you could start 10ON
Dear Sir, My name is Alvin Cruz, thirty years old and currently residing at Muntinlupa City. I am an avid fan of your football club since I was a child. One of my unforgettable childhood memories was when your team defeated and our local football club. It was an intense game and I remember the final score was only one digit difference. The reason I am sending this letter to apply in your job posting advertised last week as a part-time fitness trainer. I was working previously as a personal trainer of Manny Pacquiao for ten years before being elected as a Senator. I am a licensed practitioner and expert in a cardiovascular workout. One of my key of expertise is knee injury rehabilitation which I know will be useful with your team. I could start immediately once we both agree with the salary. Also since this is a part-time job, please do let me know the team schedule. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future. Sincerely yours, Alvin Cruz
Dear Sir,

My name is Alvin Cruz, thirty years
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Muntinlupa
City. I am an avid fan of your football club since I was a child. One of my unforgettable childhood memories was when your team defeated and our local football club. It was an intense game and I remember the final score was
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only
one digit difference.

The reason I am sending this letter to apply in your job posting advertised last week as a part-time fitness trainer. I was working previously as a personal trainer of
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Manny
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Pacquiao
for ten years
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before
being elected
as a Senator. I am a licensed practitioner and expert in a cardiovascular workout. One of my key of expertise is knee injury rehabilitation which I know will be useful with your team.

I could
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start
immediately once we both
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agree
with the salary.
Also
since this is a part-time job,
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please
do
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let
me know the team schedule.

I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.

Sincerely
yours,

Alvin Cruz
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IELTS letter You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have tell him/her when you think you could start

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  American English
7 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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