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You are going to travel to your friend's town. You should ask him some information about the town.

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Dear Susan, How are you? I hope you are well. I am so sorry for not writing sooner but I was busy with my CEFR exams I really have not had a suitable opportunity. Our school staff is planning a trip to your town next month. I want you to give me some information about your native town. To be honest, we are going there for a weekend holiday. That's why my colleagues want to know the best places in your area to have a rest. In addition that, we are going to stay in "Grand Hotel" which is the most up to date hotel in your country. Also, I want to know what it costs there to hire a single room for two days. Finally, can you tell me some more about places where we can spend our two days exciting. I hope you can help me with these details. Please let me know as soon as possible you can. Love, Angie.

Dear Susan,

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IELTS letter You are going to travel to your friend's town. You should ask him some information about the town.

Letter

American English

4 paragraphs

163 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 5.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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