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A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. v.2

A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. v. 2
Dear John, How are you? I hope you are healthy and happy. It's been a while since we have met. I would love to know how you all are doing. Do you still work for the Smith & Sons Incorporation? Please write me back when you can spare some time. Yesterday I took Martha and Mary to a movie theatre and decided to watch a classic movie. We finally watched 'To Kill A Mockingbird', and we thoroughly enjoyed it. It was my second time though! That reminded me of a time when we talked about Harper Lee's deep South parable concerns lawyer Atticus Finch, from the book 'To Kill A Mockingbird', who was at the centre of our conversations for a whole evening. I really enjoyed the book and lent it to you almost two years ago. I hope you have enjoyed the book as much as I did. This book is precious to me as my late grandmother once owned it and gave it to me on my graduation day. This copy is from one of the first edition and I would hate to lose it. Besides, it reminds me of my grandmother whom I deeply loved. I hope it would not trouble you to courier this book to my home address at your convenience. I wish you all the best and hope to meet you soon. Warm wishes, Patrick
Dear John,

How are you? I
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hope
you are healthy and happy. It's been a while since we have met. I would
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love
to know how you all are doing. Do you
still
work for the Smith & Sons Incorporation?
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Please
write me back when you can spare
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some
time.

Yesterday I took Martha and Mary to a movie
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theatre
and decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
a classic movie. We
finally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watched
'To Kill A Mockingbird', and we
thoroughly
enjoyed it. It was my second time though! That reminded me of a time when we talked about Harper Lee's deep South parable concerns lawyer Atticus Finch, from the
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book
'To Kill A Mockingbird', who was at the
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
of our conversations for a whole evening. I
really
enjoyed the
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book
and lent it to you almost two years ago. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hope
you have enjoyed the
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book
as much as I did.

This
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book
is precious to me as my late grandmother once
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
it and gave it to me on my graduation day. This copy is from one of the
first
edition and I would hate to lose it.
Besides
, it reminds me of my grandmother whom I
deeply
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hope
it would not trouble you to courier this
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book
to my home address at your convenience.

I wish you all the best and
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hope
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Warm wishes,

Patrick
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
230 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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