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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • give details of your study plans: TAFE, IELTS, • explain why you want to get a part-time job: high cost of living: fees, grocery and accomodation • suggest how your friend could help you find a job: help through friends or relatives, social network

Dear, Mark I am writing to ask for your assistance to obtain a part- time job whilst I am studying in Adelaide where you are currently residing. My departure date is around corner, and I am busy with preparation. I have enrolled in Automotive Mechanic which is a 2 years course at a vocational institution known as TAFE run by the Australian government. However, it is not affordable. In order to cover the cost of my study without my parental assistance, I am planning to seek a part-time job. Due to the high cost of living in Adelaide, Not only am I able to afford the school fee, but the shared house in the city is also expensive. Therefore, I would like to arrange my transient employment prior to my arrival in Adelaide. As you have lived in the city far longer than me, I know you have not only a strong social network in Adelaide, but also a deep knowledge of the city. Could you ask your friends and relatives if someone is still looking for a position of cleaner, kitchen hand as well as delivery. provided you could do my favor, I would appreciate it. I am looking forward to seeing you soon in Adelaide. From Jong Heon Kim
Dear, Mark

I am writing to
ask for
your assistance to obtain a part- time job whilst I am studying in Adelaide where you are
currently
residing.

My departure date is around corner, and I am busy with preparation. I have enrolled in Automotive Mechanic which is a 2 years course at a vocational institution known as
TAFE
run by the Australian
government
.
However
, it is not affordable.

In order to cover the cost of my study without my parental assistance, I am planning to seek a part-time job. Due to the high cost of living in Adelaide, Not
only
am I able to afford the school fee,
but
the shared
house
in the city is
also
expensive.
Therefore
, I would like to arrange my transient employment prior to my arrival in Adelaide.

As you have
lived
in the city far longer than me, I know you have not
only
a strong social network in Adelaide,
but
also
a deep knowledge of the city. Could you ask your friends and relatives if someone is
still
looking for a position of cleaner, kitchen hand
as well
as delivery
.
provided
you could do my favor, I would appreciate it.

I am looking forward to seeing you
soon
in Adelaide.

From
Jong
Heon
Kim
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IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • give details of your study plans: TAFE, IELTS, • explain why you want to get a part-time job: high cost of living: fees, grocery and accomodation • suggest how your friend could help you find a job: help through friends or relatives, social network

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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