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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, ● give details of your study plans ● explain why you want to get a part-time job ● suggest how your friend could help you find a job

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, ● give details of your study plans ● explain why you want to get a part-time job ● suggest how your friend could help you find a job kJ9R
Dear Sam, I am writing to let you know that I have got admission in a reputable university in your country and I will soon be joining you there. I have enrolled in Masters of Big Data Analytics program and my term will start from 1st January. I will be landing in Canada on 27th December and according to the schedule, most of my classes are in the morning. Therefore, I will have enough free time during the evening. The program I have opted is of 2 years duration and quite expensive. I have some money with me but that will not last for two years to cover semester fee, rental accommodation and other expenses. In order to be able to be bear these expenses, I need to look for a part-time work. Since you have been living there for a long time, so I can rely on you to be of some help in finding a suitable decent-paying part time work. I will be available for 6 hours in the evening and will prefer a place not very far from university. Please suggest some places where I can apply and also refer me where you have contacts. Best Regards Mehrish
Dear Sam,

I am writing to
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let
you know that I have
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got
admission in a reputable university in your country and I will
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soon
be joining you there.

I have enrolled in Masters of
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Big
Data Analytics program and my term will
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start
from 1st January.
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I
will be landing in Canada on 27th December and according to the schedule, most of my classes are in the morning.
Therefore
, I will have
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enough
free time during the evening.

The program I have opted is of 2 years duration and quite expensive. I have
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some
money with me
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but
that will not last for two years to cover semester fee, rental accommodation and other expenses. In order to be able to be bear these expenses, I need to look for a part-time work.

Since you have been living there for a long time,
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so
I can rely on you to be of
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some
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help
in finding a suitable decent-paying
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part time
work. I will be available for 6 hours in the evening and will prefer a place not
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very
far from university.
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Please
suggest
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some
places where I can apply and
also
refer me where you have contacts.

Best Regards

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Mehrish
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IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, ● give details of your study plans ● explain why you want to get a part-time job ● suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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