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You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college

You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college MNxe
Dear. Greenmount college officer I’m ____, From South Korea. I’m going to have short training course From 3th Mar in your college. I’m writing to this letter for asking accommodation. It’s first time to stay at there, I’m really looking forward to have class in your college. I would like to ask you, could I get information of somewhere to stay in. And I would appreciated, If I get information of it. I will give you more detail about me. I’m going to stay for 3weeks. It is will be from 3th Mar until 31th Mar. The best of accommodation for me is that staying alone near by collage. However, I don’t mind to stay with other students. I don’t want to stay in family house. The maximum of budget is 400pound per a week. As you can see, It’s kind of short time. Therefore It’s might difficult to find. Please let me know, if you find somewhere fit my situation.
Dear.
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Greenmount
college
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officer


I’m ____, From South Korea. I’m going to have short training course From
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3th
Mar in your college.
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I
’m writing to this letter for asking accommodation.

It’s
first
time to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
at there, I’m
really
looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to having".
to have
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class
in your college. I would like to ask you, could I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
information of somewhere to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
in.

And I would
The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: "appreciate"
appreciated
, If I
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get
information of it.

I will give you more detail about me. I’m going to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
for 3weeks.

It is will be from
Please check the suffix, if this is an ordinal number.
3th
Mar until
Please check the suffix, if this is an ordinal number.
31th
Mar. The best of accommodation for me is that staying alone
Did you mean "nearby"?
near by
collage.
However
, I don’t mind to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
with other students.

I don’t want to
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stay
in family
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. The maximum of budget is
Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.
400pound
per a week.

As you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
, It’s kind of short time.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
It’s might difficult to find.
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Please
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let
me know
If " if" starts an indirect question, you do not need to put a comma before it.
, if
you find somewhere fit my situation.

IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
161 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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