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You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to ask you for some information relating to the accomodation in your college. I am Hien, a new intern in the major of Mathematics. I am looking for an accommodation that I could live in the next 2 months when I will be working here. If possible, I would like to find a dormitory inside the college venue or a small room in the neighboring area. It will be delightful if I can dwell in a quiet and security environment with a reasonable price that I can afford. The time when I stay will last 2 months, consequently I wish for accommodation with available facilities such as a stove, a kettle and an air conditioner. I plan to arrive on the 15th of this month and move out when my internship time finishes. Therefore, I sincerely appreciate it if you could kindly find me accommodation or either give me a list of addresses that I can write to before the 12nd. I am grateful for your help, and I am looking forward to your response in the near future. Yours faithfully, Hien
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to ask you for
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some
information relating to the
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accomodation
in your college.

I am
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Hien
, a new intern in the major of Mathematics.
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I
am looking for
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an accommodation
that I could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the
next
2 months when I will be working here. If possible, I would like to find a dormitory inside the college venue or a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
room in the neighboring area. It will be delightful if I can dwell in a quiet and security environment with a reasonable price that I can afford. The time when I stay will last 2 months,
consequently
I wish for accommodation with available facilities such as a stove, a kettle and an air conditioner.

I plan to arrive on the 15th of this month and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
out when my internship time finishes.
Therefore
, I
sincerely
appreciate it if you could kindly find me accommodation or either give me a list of addresses that I can write to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the 12nd.

I am grateful for your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
, and I am looking forward to your response in the near future.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Hien

IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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