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You are attending an evening course at a college. Write a letter to the administrator of the college. 1. What do you like about the course? 2. What are some areas of improvement? 3. What is your suggestion?

You are attending an evening course at a college. Write a letter to the administrator of the college. 1. What do you like about the course? 2. What are some areas of improvement? 3. What is your suggestion? r8bYp
Dear Sir/Madam, My enrolment number is 45678 and I am a 3rd-year student of MBA program from the evening batch at your college. I am writing this letter to propose some suggestions for one of the modules in our course. Having Operation Management as a course in the final term, helps us in getting an in-depth understanding of the functioning of the manufacturing as well as the production segment of an organization. Moreover, with this module I can relate the inter-connection of all the other departments such as Finance, Human Resource and Marketing at the firm. However, unlike the morning batch, we do not receive any practical knowledge of this module in the evening batch as the lecturer from the Lab is not available during this time. Therefore, I would request you to please look into the matter and try if we can have a Lab teacher so as to enhance our practical knowledge in the course. I look forward to hearing from you on the way forward. Yours faithfully, Sweta Singh
Dear Sir/Madam,

My
Possible spelling mistake. 'enrolment' is British English.
enrolment
number is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
45678 and
I am a 3rd-year student of MBA program from the evening batch at your college. I am writing this letter to propose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestions for one of the modules in our course.

Having Operation Management as a course in the final term,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us in getting an in-depth understanding of the functioning of the manufacturing
as well
as the production segment of an organization.
Moreover
, with this module I can relate the inter-connection of all the other departments such as Finance, Human Resource and Marketing at the firm.

However
, unlike the morning batch, we do not receive any practical knowledge of this module in the evening batch as the lecturer from the Lab is not available during this time.

Therefore
, I would request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
look into the matter and try if we can have a Lab teacher
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
enhance our practical knowledge in the course.

I look forward to hearing from you on the way forward.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Sweta
Singh
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IELTS letter You are attending an evening course at a college. Write a letter to the administrator of the college. 1. What do you like about the course? 2. What are some areas of improvement? 3. What is your suggestion?

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  American English
8 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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